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It’s not normal,
How could it be?
To think of death,
As the only way to be free.

I’m so trapped,
This life is closing down,
The walls fall around me,
As im deafened by the sound,
The sound that punches,
From inside my chest,
Suddenly,
The pain has found a voice,
A sound that could deafen,
The entire planet,
It screams of all the times,
I hurt so much,
Nothing could repair me,
It howls,
At the every tear that slowly destroyed me,
Corroded me.

How can no one see this!!
How can no one realise,
I’m really not dealing with this life,
My only consciousness,
Is brought about by a knife.

Please kill me,
Please make me someone new,
At least destroy the memories,
Of the nightmares ive been through.

I cant pretend much longer,
Things are not ok,
I cannot live,
There’s not much more of me to give,
So maybe its time,
I gave this life away.

I wish that I could be,
So much more than what I am,
I try to improve this tattered shell,
I just keep hoping that I can.

The hope is wearing thin now,
The dreams are long since gone,
I think that this is it now,
Quite simply,
I can’t go on.
forget it all. forget the past. forget things ever happened. forget the times shared. forget what was there. the feelings, the emotions. just forget it all. its all over now. i want a new start. nothing from the old life. undo all the pain. forget i ever felt it. forget the fact that i ever even cared. why bother with it any longer?
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VS-Lucidia Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2010   Writer
You...are the best poet...I've ever met...
Its such great poetry, I'm adding u to my deviant watch, gj very nice
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dupbr13 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
This gonna sound weird but, thanks for writing this, 'cause sometimes,its nice to have someone else express your thoughts for you.When you are the one who just can't seem to put them into words.
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(and if this story is true.)
Everyone is here for a reason, and when we are ment to go we will.No one should ever take their own life,(trust me ive tried.) But there will always be some one who cares. Yes, even if you think there isnt. Sure everyone can try to forget, but not everyone can forgive.Everyone including you has a reason to live, weather you see it or still have yet to see it.

The best things are unseen.
Thats why we close our eys when we kiss, cry and dream.
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Teenage-Confusion Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2008
i think its really good. i can relate in my own ways. excellent job.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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BluefromTheWest Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008   Writer
An understandable feeling that alot of people go through --- i mean i've talked to alot of my friends and we all have come to a point like this in our life (some of us aren't past it *shrug*)

I've learned to not put too much credence in other's words and actions, because they can be accidental, they can be intentional, but you'll never know.
I've also learned to take it all in stride, take it with a grain of salt.

i'm not saying this to console you but i'm just stating you aren't alone (or hopefully, you weren't alone)

it is a great portrayal of your feelings, very charged
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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Ancient-Hoofbeats Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2007  Student General Artist
again, interesting...hope you're ok.
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Fruit-Loop-Princess Featured By Owner May 12, 2008  Student Digital Artist
She isn't. She died.
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Ancient-Hoofbeats Featured By Owner May 12, 2008  Student General Artist
and how would YOU know this?
Sorry, but I've met too many trolls to believe a random person...I know she left DA, but unless you have proof of her death, I'm not inclined to believe you...
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Fruit-Loop-Princess Featured By Owner May 12, 2008  Student Digital Artist
Well thats your problem, isn't it.
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Squirrelly-Ruler Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007
wow that was really good. with the way you moved your words along so easily and the emotion in your poem really touched me. i am favoriting this.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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WildWeirdo17 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007   Writer
Very nicely written. I hope you are okay. I favourited this, again, very nice.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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aliaofdune Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2006
Beautiful poem! I love it! :)
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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lost--beauty Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2005
Love it :) such emotion...
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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yet2bforsaken Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2005   Writer
Well done ... definately a favorite of mine..
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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the-dark-fairy Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2005   Interface Designer
I have recently been released from a hospital suffering from sevear bulemia and self mutilation. i wouldnt say i have recovered but i am well on my way there, but while i was in there i noticed the lack of understanding for teens with these or simalar problems and how hard it is to find treatment. So i am going to write a book of all short stories by teenagers that have gone through these or simalar problems or if they have been close to someone that has *ie parent, brother etc.... it will be a non profit book and all procedes will go to a charity for teens with this problem that may offer a counseling service or maybe help to better treat people with this problem because as i said when i was going through this there was no where for me to go because everyone said i was too far gone for help and no one would take me. so anyone that is intrested please let me no what you think!!! and any thing is good weather you have had a drug problem or have been in juvinile or homeless... anything helps.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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sunny1221 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2004
this is wonderful!
I hope you can go on now ^^;
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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poetic-abortion Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2004
i like this, i understand everything behind it. you did a good way at exposing those emotions, good job. i have some poems kinda like it. i know how it feels :(
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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EC-BPB Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2004   Interface Designer
damn, this poem is horrible, but good... it shows the feeling that most people cant show... i love it, plz, no more, i will kill some 1
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unknownskank Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009   Writer
I found my password for this account again. Just to let you know, I am not dead, I'm still alive & I'm here. If your interested, I also have a new account in which I use frequently now; [link]
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dispositioned Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004
Oh please...

Suicide is not a joke, but this piece definitely is.
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bb-teen-titans Featured By Owner May 29, 2004
God I read this poem and was like, "Dude, I totally know the feeling!". And I do. Everything in the poem I know, kinda. I would say something, but why try to help if you feel the same. Great poem.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 29, 2004   Writer
thank you.
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bb-teen-titans Featured By Owner May 30, 2004
Your welcome.
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crimsonlarko Featured By Owner May 27, 2004   Writer
whinge. whinge. whinge.

cut your wrists already.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 27, 2004   Writer
LOL.. nah :) i wont just for you =)
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crimsonlarko Featured By Owner May 27, 2004   Writer
fuck you.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 27, 2004   Writer
gladly.
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enpurx Featured By Owner May 20, 2004  Hobbyist Photographer
woah u get a lotta comments... anyways i really lubbed ure poem! i liked how it rhymed and the display of emotion. i could really connect and that made it even better. write on!
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 20, 2004   Writer
thank-you.
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Hit-and-Run Featured By Owner May 20, 2004   Writer
That's amazing....very well written. But don't worry about it, everything will look better sooner than later, I know you're probably so sick an tired of waiting, but just remember how much others need you, and that is worth something. Anyways, outstanding poem really...!
:heart:
Lee
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 20, 2004   Writer
thank-you.
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ahmado Featured By Owner May 20, 2004
Good but cheer up lol
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 20, 2004   Writer
=]
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ahmado Featured By Owner May 20, 2004
Good , but cheer up lol
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Insentient Featured By Owner May 20, 2004
is this the best you can do? Is this normal standard of poetry on this website, for if this is the case I am deeply disappointed and embarrassed even. I have trouble seeing how this is poetry, if you took out your line breaks this would read as one big long whinge.
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Ancient-Hoofbeats Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2007  Student General Artist
oh shut UP...
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 20, 2004   Writer
well thats nice you think that isnt it.
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monkeybike Featured By Owner May 20, 2004
good poem, despite the fact that it is the most depressing thing ive read in a long time, do you actually feel like that!??

or do you find sadness beautiful?
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 20, 2004   Writer
ummm right.
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bubblehead Featured By Owner May 19, 2004
i think this is the only poem i can understand completely on an emotional level, even though it may be cliche or something. yeah, pain, woo hoo. of course most of my pain was from self-hatred, so it was self applied, you know, in love with my own sorrow, or pain, or whatever. the thing, is, you never have to feel that way. it took me forever to figure that out. physical pain is easy for me to deal with, but negative self-talk, a demon that i refused to let go of. well, whatever. sometimes i still feel liek words are empty, and life is, but i know better, i guess it's more that my words and life are, but i know better than that too. anyway, if it's what you feel, then cliche or not, it's very real, and it's good to recognize, though not to drown in it, so, it's not stupid to feel, because you're feelings are never stupid, but it can be stupid to keep feeling it. yeah. whatever.
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unknownskank Featured By Owner May 19, 2004   Writer
yeah..
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